Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:43:24 PM)
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snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:45:15 PM)
alrght.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:45:30 PM)
Your paradigm needs work. That doesn't tell me anything about how your pc percieves mgic, how it works why it works.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:45:40 PM)
and I'm not going tot ake a long, drawn out explanation here.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:45:46 PM)
ok
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:45:56 PM)
You need to retool that before I can sanction the sheet.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:46:22 PM)
"the power comes from in him" is sooo generic, it's like a box of cereal. corn flakes. I need to know why the power comes from in him, what causes it, what focusees it.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:46:28 PM)
I need resonance traits. that will help.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:46:46 PM)
I didnt see anywhere to put those
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:47:22 PM)
Paradigm is like your road map for magic. It tells you not only how to get there, but where you can go, what kind of vehicle you drive, if any, and the stops you take on the way.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:47:28 PM)
I want to see this in your history thread.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:47:51 PM)
ok
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:48:22 PM)
that being said, let's look at the rest of your sheet. Read the appropriate tradbook. It doesn't have to be more than a paragraph, but it does need to be more than one sentence.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:48:58 PM)
Ok I have the trad book and i had a decent way of explaining it just fiald when i went to place it on teh sheet.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:52:19 PM)
The flaws don't seem to make sense with the rest of the sheet. I am not sanctioning them.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:54:52 PM)
I guess i can see what yoru saying ion deep sleeper but I thought the cumpulsion was pretty good.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:55:33 PM)
The compulsion, especially at that level, I don't think will ever come into play.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:55:47 PM)
what will help you, especially with the paradigm, are a description for the avatar.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:56:46 PM)
Woudl Never refusing a reasonable offer perhaps work as a better compulsion?
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:57:10 PM)
making it a 2 pt flaw instead of a 4pt, I'd be willing to go for.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:57:39 PM)
Even with how often that would come into play?
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:58:23 PM)
yes.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 1:58:55 PM)
Reasonable is subjective, after all
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:59:04 PM)
ok fair enough
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 1:59:32 PM)
so i still need three points worth of flaws, to descibe the avatar and finish retooling the paradigm description
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:00:28 PM)
no, you don't
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:00:32 PM)
let me tally the sheet again.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:00:38 PM)
I removed the ability aptitude merit
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:00:43 PM)
ok
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:01:55 PM)
How about addiction 2 point flaw?
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:02:03 PM)
No, I think you're Ok
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:02:08 PM)
I think you get seven backgrounds
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:02:11 PM)
alrighty
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:04:51 PM)
OK so just post the reworked paradigm were i posted my thread yes?
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:04:56 PM)
reword the paradigm
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:05:03 PM)
I need a description for the avatar
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:05:07 PM)
i need your resonance traits
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:05:11 PM)
and tomorrow, we'll try this again.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:05:13 PM)
Spinning and whirling
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:05:36 PM)
that's cool. works for dirvish. put it in the thread.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:05:49 PM)
okso paradigm avatar and the resonance
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:06:04 PM)
yes.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:06:17 PM)
the sheet itself? I'd like to know why the streetwise 3 and crafts 4, but honestly it looks OK other than that.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:06:29 PM)
I wasn't going to disallow it, I just wanted to know the reason why
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:07:56 PM)
Streetwise he has been on or around the streets or at leats the not so good area's for long enough he knows where and where not to go who to talk to to get what he needs or who not to talk to because they may not have the best stuff or at leats knows who to go to to find that out.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:08:11 PM)
toss this in the history thread;)
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:08:22 PM)
ok same with crafts as well
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:08:25 PM)
I'm goiing to put you on your honor and give you a week, instead of a day to rewrite this
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:08:29 PM)
crafts I'd like a little more
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:08:34 PM)
I can do that
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:08:34 PM)
that's a master level skill
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:08:43 PM)
and I'm going to give you a temporary icon.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:09:17 PM)
ok cool thank you!
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:09:40 PM)
I already have teh paradigm reworded and i am allready working on teh avatar and noting the other things you needed as well
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:09:50 PM)
If its not posted tonight befor i got to work it wioll be tomorrow
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:09:53 PM)
Ok
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:11:16 PM)
confriming i have all i need paradigm Avatar Resonence traits streetwise and crafts explanations
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:11:19 PM)
Am i missing anything?
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:11:36 PM)
yes
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:11:43 PM)
whirling and twirling are basically the same thing
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:11:47 PM)
I need another resoance trait.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:12:25 PM)
Can a sence of innertia be one? specificaly like that dizzy sensation?
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:12:49 PM)
inertia is more static than anything else
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:12:53 PM)
and we'll discuss it in your thread.
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:13:18 PM)
Ok I'll work it over and give you another resonance more dynamic like
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:14:16 PM)
other then the above thats it right?
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:14:35 PM)
look into the dirvishh religion.
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:14:40 PM)
you'll like what you see
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:14:47 PM)
I'm temp iconning you, and we'll go from there, Ok?
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:15:03 PM)
works for me
snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:15:34 PM)
enjoy your icon
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:15:49 PM)
thanks ^_^
Donald 'Dirvish' Doutrive (Sep 12, 2010 2:15:53 PM)
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snowcrane (Sep 12, 2010 2:16:46 PM)
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